Sean Pendr

simple really alll you need to do is place discritpions in thoughts or speech and weave the events through action words...... i hope that helps have fun! :)

if you want a sherlock holmes or that kind of type i can definatly help you there if i dont give you enough info in this you can pm me ...

agian with the coma thing....your character could have tried to commit suicide by shooting himself and ended up loging the bullet into his medulla self inducing a temporary coma or ...

thanks everybody..... Also one of you asked who were my favorite authors? well the three gods of fantasy are Christopher Paolini, Garth Nix, and J.R.R. Tolkin. thank you agian and ...

i love it! but you should make sure theres a discription of the time break and how far away the secon place is. have fun writing more this isnt a ...

Hiya Black Dove, this was good, yep a little on the light side for detail but remember the quote "simplicity in detail" so make it a little more detailed and ...

Ello Mates, I'm Sean Pendr another one of you hopeful writers out there.....wahooo......Anyway I am Currently writing a book and then i wil write its prequal you can get to ...